Here’s a working thesis with potential: you have highlighted an important aspect of the novel for investigation. However, it’s still not clear what your analysis will reveal. Your reader is intrigued but is still thinking, “So what? What’s the point of this contrast? What does it signify?” Perhaps you are not sure yet, either. That’s fine—begin to work on comparing scenes from the book and see what you discover. Free write, make lists, jot down Huck’s actions and reactions. Eventually you will be able to clarify for yourself, and then for the reader, why this contrast matters. After examining the evidence and considering your own insights, you write:
Although open campus lunch has some potential benefits, the negative aspects of it highly outweigh the positives. Unfortunately open campus lunch serves as a threat to the health and safety of students. Also, it would hurt students’ wallets as well as their attendance in their afternoon classes.
For many students, open campus lunch would mean a lunch of fattening fast food. Having a closed-campus lunch better allows schools to have some influence over the health of their students. The Healthy, Hunger-Free Kids Act championed by the First Lady and signed by President Obama in 2010 called for the first major changes in school lunches in fifteen years. The United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) set nutrition standards for school lunches in order to help raise a healthier generation of children and if high schools allowed open campus lunch, students would be exposed to meals with lower nutritional value than that of school lunches.
The safety of students is also at risk because they would be rushing to get off school grounds and to their lunch destinations. Also, restaurants in close proximity would be swamped with high school students in addition to their typical daily lunch rush which gives students another reason for students to arrive quickly since they won’t want to wait in enormous lines to order their meals. High school students that are licensed are young, inexperienced and sometimes reckless drivers and are more likely to get in a car accident on or near school grounds if they are all in such a hurry.
Safety of students is also threatened because of security issues that arise when they are returning to school. With the chaos of students flooding in, it would be difficult to screen everyone making it very easy for a student to smuggle in drugs or a weapon. It would also be easier for a dangerous stranger with a weapon or drugs to slip in concealed by the wave of high school students.
Allowing students the privilege of open campus lunch would more than likely end up hurting them monetarily. Most restaurants sell food at a higher price than cafeterias do so students would be spending more money for lunch each day. Licensed students with a car would also be paying more money to put gas in their car for the additional fuel they would burn each day driving to their lunch destinations.
Lastly, allowing students the freedom of an open campus lunch would hurt school attendance because it would much easier for a student to skip their afternoon classes. Of course many students would be responsible enough to have the motivation to return to school, however they could still have to deal with unexpected problems that would make them late when returning to school such as heavy traffic.